Excerpt from “You’ve Got One of Them” Ad for Supp-hose Socks

• The hook is good because it gets you curious to read the rest. Which is what the hook is supposed to do, after all.

• Self-identification: “Over 21” & “Over 40”. ‘Hey, that’s me!’

• Flavor & humor, doesn’t take itself too seriously: “Oh-My-Legs-Are-Killing-Me” as a “legitimate” form of leg fatigue.

• Does this feel familiar? Good eye. Classic PAS. Problem — Agitation — Solution.

You glance at your watch.

It’s 6:28. You’ve been at it since 3.
Crap. Your hot date is at 7. Running late. Sink shower it is.
Nowhere close to done editing…

“…at least all the ideas are laid out, so there’s that. Did I miss anything? I don’t think so? Ok, but how do I make it flow? I need to get the final draft to Stacey for design asap, team cutoff is at noon Thursday…”

You’ve spent dinner completely distracted. Your date just took off. You go home exhausted, plod to your desk, and crack open the laptop.

Or… it could go like this:

5:41 — you’re out of the shower and lip-syncing.
6:17 — dressed to the nines and zenned out.
7:03 — the sunset glints off your aviators as you smile hello.
8:36 — it actually feels like you’re hitting it off. Not just hot, funny to boot.
Next morning, 10:27 — polished draft ready in your inbox.
10:31 — Stacey messages back, “thanks, looks good!”

The difference?

You had Copygloss handle it yesterday afternoon.

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