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7-SEP-2024 | Excerpt from Moosejaw’s About Page

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Dan Bogachek
September 07, 2024

Excerpt from Moosejaw’s About Page

About Moosejaw

Call us at 877-Moosejaw or email us if you need help with your order, have a gear question or just want to talk. If you’re trying to figure out what 877-Moosejaw is on your Blackberry right now you can’t do it because the numbers and letters don’t match like a normal phone. So, instead of resorting to a landline please call 877-666-7352.

If you’re interested in a little Moosejaw history please read on. If not, please shut your eyes.

1992 - Moosejaw opens in Keego Harbor, Michigan. My mom got a new Mountaineer. My girlfriend cheated on me but the boy was super handsome so you can’t really blame her.

1993 - I was named best hide-and-seek player at Moosejaw after hiding under a poncho in the shop for six straight days. It was actually a cagoule.

Dripping with personality. And the About page is the perfect place to build lore around your brand.

  • Written with a ton of “you” language.

  • Variation in the sentence length keeps it feeling fresh.

  • Grade 5 on the Hemingway app.

You glance at your watch.

It’s 6:28. You’ve been at it since 3.
Crap. Your hot date is at 7. Running late. Sink shower it is.
Nowhere close to done editing…

“…at least all the ideas are laid out, so there’s that. Did I miss anything? I don’t think so? Ok, but how do I make it flow? I need to get the final draft to Stacey for design asap, team cutoff is at noon Thursday…”

You’ve spent dinner completely distracted. Your date just took off. You go home exhausted, plod to your desk, and crack open the laptop.

Or… it could go like this:

5:41 — you’re out of the shower and lip-syncing.
6:17 — dressed to the nines and zenned out.
7:03 — the sunset glints off your aviators as you smile hello.
8:36 — it actually feels like you’re hitting it off. Not just hot, funny to boot.
Next morning, 10:27 — polished draft ready in your inbox.
10:31 — Stacey messages back, “thanks, looks good!”

The difference?

You had Copygloss handle it yesterday afternoon.

For help with editing, email Dan:
[email protected].